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Old 08-31-2005, 09:28 AM
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HEY FOLKS!!

There are plenty of us who are students out there and being students, we have to write papers, essays, and more. And I know it's always helpful to have someone else read our writings and check for spelling, grammar and just general flow.

Here is a place to drop off your papers and have others read over them for grammar, spelling, and other little bits.

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This is a great idea!!! I know I have a paper a week due starting next week!!!
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If everyone is comfortable, please be sure and copy & paste them rather than attaching them. This isn't a requirement, and I know some people may be uncomfortable posting their work, but if you don't mind please copy & paste them into a new post when possible.

I'm going to have to go see if I can find some of my old papers from years past and post them just for fun. They you all can check me out and see if the grade(s) I got were on the money or I got preferential treatment... lol
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Alright I guess I am the first to post a paper for the grammar police. THis is part A of my I-Search paper. It is a narrative, Part B is the research aspect.




Living Life with an Amputation


“So there is nothing else that they can do?” That is what I heard my dad say the morning of August 23, 2005. My grandfather had come to visit because my sister was having a baby and before he went back to Georgia my dad wanted him to get his right leg checked out because it had been causing him a lot of pain. The arteries in his right leg were so obstructed that there was no blood flow getting to his right foot.

Now my grandfather he has always been an independent man. In his 78 years on this earth he raised 12 children and worked until he was basically made to stop. He lives alone and doesn’t like to have people “fussing over him” as he says. Then in a matter of days his whole life changed. The blood loss to his foot had made his foot die. We rushed to the hospital and the doctor came in. “The infection is so bad that we are going to have to do surgery first thing in the morning, if not the infection can get in his blood and he may be comatose in the next couple days. We hope to be able to amputate below the knee, but your circulation is so bad that we may not be able to. We would also like to try to clear the obstruction in your artery so that the healing will go better.”

I was in total disbelief. Sure this happened to people all the time, but not my grandfather. My first thought was: How is he going to resume a normal life with the loss of his leg? We stayed with him until he went to sleep and were back at 8:00 a.m. Sunday morning. Granddaddy has always been a strong man and even knowing they were about to take his leg he still stayed in good sprits. When I got upset about it he comforted me saying “Baby, it is just one of them things.”

The doctor came out 2 hours later and says that the surgery was a success. They were able to amputate below the knee and after some rehabilitation and healing they could have him fitted for a prosthetic leg. He had to stay in the hospital for a week after the surgery to make sure the leg healed properly. My grandfather is now on the road to recovery. He has to stay in a nursing home for a total of 20 days. Everyone is impressed about how strong he is and how he is able to do a whole lot on his own already. He has already been there for two weeks, so one more week and he will be home. He wants to go back to Georgia once he is better.
If he goes back once again I wonder: How will he do all the things he did before with just one leg. Yes, he can get a prosthetic, but that isn’t for a while. How do people who have a limb amputated go on with normal life?
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Okay... I'm a comma nut, so I put the commas in as well as changed a few verb tenses. It's a great paper and it's great to hear that your grandfather is doing well!! And that he has such a great attitude about it!!

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Living Life with an Amputation


“So there is nothing else that they can do?” That is what I heard my dad say the morning of August 23, 2005. My grandfather had come to visit because my sister was having a baby and before he went back to Georgia, my dad wanted him to get his right leg checked out because it had been causing him a lot of pain. The arteries in his right leg were so obstructed that there was no blood flow getting to his right foot.

My grandfather, he has always been an independent man. In his 78 years on this earth, he raised 12 children and worked until he was basically forced to stop. He lives alone and doesn’t like to have people “fussing over him,” as he says. Then, in a matter of days, his whole life changed. The blood loss to his foot had made his foot die. We rushed to the hospital and the doctor came in. “The infection is so bad that we are going to have to do surgery first thing in the morning. If not, the infection can get into his blood and he may be comatose in the next couple days. We hope to be able to amputate below the knee, but your circulation is so bad that we may not be able to. We would also like to try to clear the obstruction in your artery so that the healing will go better.”

I was in total disbelief. Sure this happens to people all the time, but not my grandfather. My first thought was, "How is he going to resume a normal life with the loss of his leg?" We stayed with him until he went to sleep and were back at 8:00 a.m. on Sunday morning. Granddaddy has always been a strong man and even knowing they were about to take his leg, he still stayed in good sprits. When I got upset about it he comforted me saying “Baby, it is just one of them things.”

The doctor came out 2 hours later and said that the surgery was a success. They were able to amputate below the knee and after some rehabilitation and healing, they could have him fitted for a prosthetic leg. He had to stay in the hospital for a week after the surgery to make sure the leg healed properly. My grandfather is now on the road to recovery. He had to stay in a nursing home for a total of 20 days. Everyone is impressed about how strong he is and how he is able to do a whole lot on his own already. He has been there for two weeks, so one more week and he will be home. He wants to go back to Georgia once he is better.
If he goes back once again I wonder, "How will he do all the things he did before with just one leg." Yes, he can get a prosthetic, but that isn’t for a while. How do people who have a limb amputated go on with normal life?
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nice idea mrs. benji........i just got done writing mine......but i'll keep this in mind for the next one.......or i can help proof read
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My grandfather, he has always been an independent man.

I think this might read better and not sound redundant like this:

My grandfather has always been an independent man.
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Thanks ladies!!!! I am not the best with commas and all that.
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Okay, this has to be turned in on Tuesday, its for my Medical Law & Ethics class. I had my mom proof read it, but I think she was just checking for spelling and obvious errors. Id really appreciate it if you would check it out for me!! warning...its long

The topic of this report is Euthanasia. Euthanasia is defined as “The act or practice of ending the life of an individual suffering from a terminal illness or an incurable condition, as by lethal injection or the suspension of extraordinary medical treatment.”(1) There are many legal and ethical issues surrounding Euthanasia, also referred to as physician-assisted suicide. Two of the most popular names associated with Euthanasia are Dr. Jack Kevorkian and Theresa (Terri) Schiavo. My primary focus will be Terri Schiavo, her story, and her family’s fight to keep her alive. My secondary focus will be on Dr. Jack Kevorkian and how he influenced physician-assisted suicide.
Terri Schindler was born and raised in Pennsylvania. Family and friends described her as a shy, quiet, overweight child, who wore big glasses. Little did they know that 40 years later she would be making headline news around the world. Terri became a household name in February of 2005. Though that’s when some of us heard the name Terri Schiavo, that’s not when her story began.
In November of 1984 Terri married first boyfriend and first kiss: Michael Schiavo. Six years later, on February 25, 1990, Terri collapsed in her hallway at approximately 4:30am; an ambulance was called at 5:50 am. Most people believe this collapse was caused by a potassium imbalance due to bulimia that caused heart failure. Terri then went into what doctors call a persistent vegetative state, a feeding tube was inserted. For the next two years Terri was moved between various hospitals and rehabilitation centers, still remaining in a coma-like condition.
In November 1992 Michael Schiavo filed a medical malpractice suit against one of Terri’s doctors and was awarded over one million doctors. Michael kept $300,000 of it and put $750,000 aside for Terri’s rehabilitation; that he later denied her of having.
The first major turn of events in this case is in May 1998. Michael petitioned the court to remove his wife’s feeding tube. After a 2 year battle, Judge George Greer of the Pinellas-Pasco County Circuit Court, ordered that Terri’s feeding tube be removed because of her being in a persistent vegetative state with no chance of improvement. Less than a month later Terri’s parents file a petition with the Judge to perform a test to determine if Terri can take in or consume nutrients on her own. The petition was denied. On April 24, 2001 Terri’s feeding tube was removed. Her family filed an emergency motion with the Judge asking for a new trial because of new evidence about Mr. Schiavo lying about Terri’s wishes to not remain on life support. A new Judge ordered Terri’s feeding tube to be reinserted. The pattern continues just four days later when Michael filed an emergency motion to have Terri’s feeding tube removed again. After being heard in the 2nd District Court of Appeals in July, Michael’s motion was denied. The case was also transferred back to the original Judge; Judge Greer.
Judge Greer decides to grant Michael Schiavo’s wishes and orders Terri’s feeding tube to be removed on August 28, 2001. He also denies Terri’s parents motion to have Michael removed as Terri’s guardian, and to have their own doctors examine her. The 2nd District Court of Appeals suspended the order to remove Terri’s tube indefinitely.
The court battles flop back and forth for the next few years, keeping with the pattern of Mr. Schiavo filing to have her feeding tube removed, and the Schindlers petitioning for him to be removed as Terri’s guardian. Again, Terri’s tube was removed.
In October 2003 “Terri’s Law” was passed that gives the Governor the ability to issue a “one-time stay in certain cases” (2) Governor Jeb Bush issues an order to reinsert her feeding tube once again.
After many attempts on Mr. Schiavo’s part, in 2004 “Terri’s Law” was declared unconstitutional. Terri’s feeding tube is again scheduled to be removed on March 18, 2005. On March 31, 2005 the Schindler’s and Mr. Schiavo got into a verbal argument in the hallway outside of Terri’s room. After security was called, Mr. Schiavo requested they be escorted from the Hospice building. At 9:05a.m Terri Marie Schiavo died, with her husband by her side, and her blood family unable to say their last goodbyes.
On June 16th the Medical Examiner’s Report was released. Terri’s family issued a statement on the findings of the report. The following are quotes:
“Terri had a strong heart. In addition to her strong heart, Terri also demonstrated a very strong will to live.”
“Terri was not terminal. The Medical Examiner said with proper care Terri would have lived at least another 10 years even in her disabled condition.”
“The Medical Examiner essentially ruled out bulimia and heart attack for causes for Terri’s condition. The major question now remains, what happened?”
“The Medical Examiner’s report stated that Terri’s inability to swallow was the result of muscle atrophy. Terri was denied therapy for 12 years, we will never know if therapy would have helped.”
“Dr. William Cheshire agreed with our family’s perception that Terri was awake, aware, and at least minimally cognitive.” (3)
Terri’s family says that Terri would react when her parents walked into the room. Sometimes give a smile, and even make eye contact. The last quoted statement says that she was awake and aware. This brings up the question: did Terri realize what was happening around her? Would she have objected if she was able to talk?
Even after Terri’s passing, there is still bickering between the families. Mr. Schiavo had Terri cremated, and has retained her ashes. While Terri’s family wanted to give her a proper burial. They still have yet to have any final closure.
Oregon is currently the only state in the U.S. that has legalized physician-assisted suicide. As previously mentioned; Dr. Jack Kevorkian is also widely known for his hand in Euthanasia. Dr. Kevorkian (also known as “Dr. Death”) assisted approximately 100 people in ending their lives. Kevorkian believed that people should be able to end their lives if they were terminally ill or in severe pain. Dr Kevorkian built what he called the Suicide Machine to assist in the deaths. His patients would be hooked up to the machine that released carbon dioxide when they pressed the button. In essence, ending their own life: physician-assisted. Dr. Kevorkian is currently serving a 10-25 year sentence in a Michigan prison for 2nd Degree Murder.
In summary: I have my own views and opinions on the Terri Schiavo case that I will briefly touch on, but not go into detail about. This fifteen year tragedy could have been completely avoided if a Living Will would have been created. It was said that Terri expressed her wishes to her husband, but that just isn’t enough. I remember seeing this case on television in early February and not fully understanding the complexity of it. When I started my research for this paper I found facts that truly made me question my views on this case.
Fact 1: Michael Schiavo stated during two different interviews that he discovered Terri collapsed in the hallway of their home at 4:30 am, yet he waited until 5:40am to dial 911. What made him wait seventy minutes before deciding to call for help?
Fact 2: The Medical Examiners report states that neither bulimia nor a heart attack caused Terri’s condition. So what made her collapse? Could the seventy minute time span be related to her condition?
These are just a couple of things that I’ve been wondering since doing my research. Euthanasia is becoming a very widespread controversy. Dr. Kevorkian’s main purpose was for a persons “right to die.” Should a person have the right to end their life? If they cannot physically accomplish it themselves, should they have the right to ask for assistance? These are questions that the majority of the people will never agree on. Therefore the controversy will most likely never end.

(1) – Merriam-Webster Dictionary
(2) www.miami.edu/ethics/schiavo/timeline - page 8
(3) www.terrisfight.org/statement.html (family quotes)
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Hey Steph... I gotta do some homework, but I'll read it in a bit!!

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Terri then went into what doctors call a persistent vegetative state and a feeding tube was inserted.

Michael kept $300,000 of it and put $750,000 aside for Terri’s rehabilitation, which he later denied her.

After a 2 year battle, Judge George Greer of the Pinellas-Pasco County Circuit Court, ordered that Terri’s feeding tube be removed because of her persistent vegetative state with no chance of improvement.

Euthanasia doesn't need to be capitalized.

Everything else looks SUPER!!!

Those are the only things I could see and they are LITTLE!!

GOOD JOB!!

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Thank you so so much! I've been really worried about it because counts as 1/2 of my final grade. I have the great pleasure of reading this in front of the class tomorrow too, I'm not happy about that at all!!! Panic attack city!! lol Thank you again
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Have you been practicing young lady??!!!

Read it aloud 11 times. In theory, 11 is the magic number to make it stick but keep it natural.



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Thank ya much Jenn! I ended up with a 100% and got the best feedback in the class! I myself though it was kinda boring, but when everyone else started reading theirs...OMG. Try sitting down and listening to someone read 5-7 pages on stem cell research
Anyway, thank you again. I'm sure I'll be bugging you for the next year and a half, especially when I take comp I&II

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WOOHOOO!!! That's great!!! GOOD JOB!!!!

And it's what we're here for... to share and help one another!!

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Okay... Heres a essay for my history class... Please be gentle!!!! It doesn't look right AT ALL and doesn't sound like it flows that well. It didn't copy over well... But it is indented at the begining of the paragraphs on my word program.


The Puritans came to the New World because they felt that England violated their agreement with the Lord by accepting Catholic rituals. The Anglican Church no longer followed their original beliefs. The church was becoming more political and was veering away from the Lords agreement with the people. They felt they must leave the country, to come to the New World and form a new agreement with God. Sheltering them away from England where they could remain safe from God’s wrath. This new agreement would renew their closeness with the Lord. Although Puritans remained part of the Anglican Church in hopes that it would be
purified from within. At the same time they realized that others would observe what they were doing. Their actions would be observed and evaluated by others.


“A City on a Hill” refers to being watched by the world. To inspire the Puritans who were going to the New World, John Winthrop indicated it was their holy duty to follow the way of the Lord, inspiring the world and increasing their chances of survival in the New World. The whole world would be observing their way of life. The success would inspire and increase the Glory of the Lord. Failure would show their lack of faith and commitment to the ways of the Lord. The Puritans believed the bible was God’s true law and instructed them on a plan of living. The idea that God specially ordained their community had a powerful effect on the Puritan society of New England. In order to avoid God’s wrath by breaking their promise, the Puritans looked to maintaining perfect order within their own community. Their spiritual beliefs they held were strong and held over to the community laws and customs. When the Puritans arrived on the shores of New England, even though they were in one sense oppressed and persecuted, in their own eyes, at the encouragement of people like Winthrop, they distinguished themselves as a reassuring example to the rest of the world.

The writing style of this author indicates an educated individual, but not a highly educated in the way we are today. People of this time did not always have the opportunity for higher education, yet they were leaders and thinkers. Even though we may feel that the writing was poor, but in this time period it was normal. The reader must understand the writing. Readers of this time would be able to understand and use this writing to inspire them towards proper conduct. The grammar and spelling were not always correct, but the emotion was evident. This emotion would project towards his readers and they would be able to use the inspiration and instruction in this writing. He was highly aware of the religious teaching, but made many mistakes in the standard style of writing we are use to in this time period.

He was trying to inspire and warn the people he was addressing. They had to be aware of what was expected of them and encouragement had to be given to complete their task. The writing refers to the bible passages to provide inspiration to follow the way of the Lord. There are also references to explain what will happen if they do not follow the Lords words, which is another way to encourage the right behavior.

Throughout the writing he is providing a guideline for the success or failure of their mission. The people will be aware that they are being observed and what is expected of them. Although there are many possible negatives, Winthrop is inspiring and giving them a glimpse of a very satisfying future and give them a beginning guidepost to accomplish the difficult task ahead.
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The Puritans came to the New World because they felt that England violated their agreement with the Lord by accepting Catholic rituals. The Anglican Church no longer followed their original beliefs. The church was becoming more political and was veering away from the Lord's agreement with the people. They felt they must leave the country, to come to the New World and form a new agreement with God. Sheltering them away from England where they could remain safe from God’s wrath. (Fragment.) This new agreement would renew their closeness with the Lord. Although Puritans remained part of the Anglican Church, they kept hope that it would be
purified from within. At the same time, they realized that others would observe what they were doing. All of their actions would be observed and evaluated by others.


“A City on a Hill” refers to being watched by the world. To inspire the Puritans, who were going to the New World, John Winthrop indicates it was their holy duty to follow the way of the Lord, inspiring the world and increasing their chances of survival in the New World. The whole world would be observing their way of life. Their success would inspire and increase the Glory of the Lord. Failure would show their lack of faith and commitment to the ways of the Lord. The Puritans believed the Bible was God’s true law and instructed them on a plan of living. The idea that God specially ordained their community had a powerful effect on the Puritan society of New England. In order to avoid God’s wrath by breaking their promise, the Puritans were dedicated to maintaining perfect order within their own community. The spiritual beliefs they held were strong and were evident in their community laws and customs. When the Puritans arrived on the shores of New England, even though they were in one sense oppressed and persecuted, in their own eyes, at the encouragement of people like Winthrop, they viewedthemselves as a reassuring example to the rest of the world.

The writing style of this author indicates he is an educated individual, but not highly educated in the way we are today. People of this time did not always have the opportunity for higher education, yet they were leaders and thinkers. Even though we may feel that the writing was poor, but in his time period, it was normal. The reader must understand the writing. Readers of this time would be able to understand and use this writing to inspire them toward proper conduct. The grammar and spelling were not always correct, but the emotion was evident. This emotion could be felt by his readers and they would be able to use the inspiration and instruction in his writing for their own. He was highly aware of the religious teaching, but made many mistakes in the standard style of writing we are use to in this time period.

He was trying to inspire and warn the people he was addressing. They had to be aware of what was expected of them and encouragement had to be given to complete their task. The writing refers to the Bible passages to provide inspiration to follow the way of the Lord. There are also references to explain what will happen if they do not follow the Lords words, which was another way to encourage the right behavior.

Throughout the writing, he is providing a guideline for the success or failure of their mission. The people will be aware that they are being observed and what is expected of them. Although there are many possible negatives, Winthrop is inspiring and giving a glimpse of a very satisfying future and give them a beginning guidepost to accomplish the difficult task ahead.
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Doh. I had a ramble about the changes I made!

So... I added a few commas and changed the wording a few times, just for flow, and capitalized Bible, but everything really does look great!

GOOD JOB!!!!

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Here I am again... Thanks MrsBenji on the last one. Helped alot!!!
Heres another one. For me I think this SUCKS big time. I have been having a hard time this last month so the effort I put in this will probably show in the grade. It will probably be the one I choose to revise at the end. I am not too sure about the title yet. I will most likely change that. Don't be afraid to tell me how bad it sucks. I can take it!!! LoL English is MY WORST subject and if I didn't have to take it I wouldn't!!!


Treatments for Depression
One of the major problems facing our generation today is depression. Approximately 18 million American adults or 10% of the population suffer from a depressive illness in any given year” (http://www.allaboutdepression.com/index.html). Depression can affect anyone, its effects may vary depending on ones age and gender. Woman, however, are twice as likely to be diagnosed with depression then men. Around 10 – 25% of woman will experience a form of major depression at some point in their lives. (Web MD) Causes of depression include but not limited to family history, stress, trauma, pessimistic personalities and physical conditions. Depression is a treatable illness, even though the majority of people suffering from depression will never seek help. Treatment is especially important because it not only affects the one suffering from it, but also can severely disrupt relationships, sleep, appetite and work.
There are many different types of depression, several different diagnoses, mostly determined by the severity of the symptoms, the durations of the symptoms and the cause of the symptoms. One form of depression is Major Depression, which is one of the most severe cases of depression. More symptoms are present with major depression, and they are usually more intense or serious. The symptoms can develop from one single traumatic experience or can develop over time as a consequence of several personal disappointments or life problems. Major depression can appear once, as a result of a traumatic trauma, respond to treatment and never appear again within ones lifetime. This is considered a single episode. Some people tend to have reoccurring depression, with episodes of depression followed by several years of no depression. This would be considered recurrent depression.
Another common form of depression is Bipolar, also called manic-depressant disorder. “Living with bipolar disorder is much like living with any chronic illness. With proper medication, education, and support (therapy, support groups, coaching, family and friends), bipolar disorder can be treated effectively.” (Kahn DA, Ross R,) This depression cause, extreme mood changes that alternate between manic episodes of abnormally high energy and the extreme lows of depression, making it hard to experience a normal range of mood. Bipolar is extremely hard to diagnose because of its many phases. Just like people who live with conditions like diabetes or heart disease, those with bipolar disorder must learn to manage the condition carefully.
There are many different ways to treat depression depending on the factors involved with the depression. Medical approach to treatment of the depression depends on the type of depression one has. With major depression it is common for one to be prescribed an anti-depressive medication temporarily, along with different forms of therapy. Bipolar is usually always requires some kind of medication, to manage the manic episodes and periods of depression. This includes antidepressants and mood stabilizers and requires long-term therapy. Several different types of medications are available for one to try, but there is no miracle medication that will treat depression in everyone. It’s trial and error with each medication, since ones body will react differently to different medications. The use of the various treatments requires close medical supervision to establish the right treatment. The kinds of depression to most likely benefit from treatment through medications are ones that’s condition last prolong periods of time (2 weeks or more) and interfere with ones ability to perform daily tasks.
There are many kinds of antidepressant medications. Trycyclic antidepressants, which are considered the “older” class of antidepressants, work quite well. They primarily affect the levels of two chemical messengers (neurotransmitters), norepinephrine and serotonin, in the brain. Although these drugs are effective in treating depression, they have more side effects, so they usually aren't the first drugs used. Some examples of effective and safe Trycyclic medications are Anafranil, Aventyl, Elavil, and Norpramin. Possible side effects would include but not limited to dry mouth, fatigue, weight gain, dizziness, increased heart rate and sexual problems.
Monoamine oxidase inhibitors (MAOIs) are another early form of antidepressant. These drugs are most effective in people with depression who do not respond to other treatments. They are also effective for other mental illnesses. Substances in certain foods, like cheese, bananas, packed soaps and beverages like wine and beer, and medications such as Sudafed can interact with an MAOI, so these people taking this medication must adhere to strict dietary restrictions. For this reason these antidepressants also aren't usually the first drugs used either. Some common perscribed medication would be Parnate, Nardil and Marplan. With side effects ranging from chest pains, vomiting and headache.
Selective serotonin reuptake inhibitors (SSRIs) are a newer form of antidepressant. These drugs work by altering the amount of a chemical in the brain called serotonin. Lexapro, Paxil, Prozac and Zoloft are common effective medications. With side effects of sexual problems, dizziness, headaches and insomnia.
Medication treats the symptoms of depression, and is often a vital part of the treatment program, but it is essential to treat the psychological problems that caused the depression. It doesn’t make much sense to prescribe medications, without offering psychotherapy or counseling as well, because of the added benefits shown in research studies. There are several people who do well and respond positively to just antidepressants, but seem to plateau at a mild level of depression without complete recovery from all the symptoms. The problems that caused the depression are still there. They haven’t worked through the problems that lead to becoming depressed. That’s where psychotherapy or counseling is needed in combination with the medication.
Psychotherapy and counseling are similar in many ways but also differ incredibly. They believe in the same process and also have much of the same goals. Counseling focuses on personal development and life adjustment, on a specific life issue. Psychotherapy does the same but more through the medically oriented model of treating a mental disease. PSYCHOTHERAPY [psychotherapy] treatment of mental and emotional disorders using psychological methods. (encyclopedia.com) With focus on the “deeper” issues with those whose life experiences are still causing distress. Counseling and psychotherapy are at both ends of a scale. At one end you have counseling which would be “brief” counseling to deal with a specific issue. Psychotherapy would be at the other end of the scale and deal with deep-rooted issues. “Some counselors or psychotherapists practice a form of 'integrative'counseling, which means they draw on and blend specific types of techniques. Other practitioners work in an 'eclectic' way, which means they take elements of several different models and combine them when working with clients.” (counseling-directory.org.uk) The most important factor that determines how successful the therapy is does not lie in the technique or approach used, but with the actual counselor.
The therapy one chooses to treat their depression takes a lot of consideration for the individual. What medications are right for their lifestyle and weighing the possible side effects. Choosing a therapy approach that suits the kind of depression one might have. It might even take awhile for you to find a counselor that you feel comfortable opening up with. Regardless it’s a step in the right direction to solving this epidemic plaguing the US. Hopefully with added awareness and appropriate diagnosis the numbers of those suffering from depression can drop or be close to be eliminated.
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One of the major problems facing our generation today is depression. Approximately 18 million American adults, 10% of the nation's population, suffer from a depressive illness in any given year (http://www.allaboutdepression.com/index.html). Depression can affect anyone. Its effects may vary depending on ones age and gender. Woman, however, are twice as likely to be diagnosed with depression than men. Between 10 to 25% of woman will experience a form of major depression at some point in their lives. (Web MD) Causes of depression can include, but are not limited to, family history, stress, trauma, pessimistic personalities and physical conditions. Depression is a treatable illness, even though the majority of people suffering from depression will never seek help. Treatment is especially important because it not only affects the one suffering from it, but also can severely disrupt relationships, sleep, appetite and work.
There are many different types of depression and several different diagnoses, mostly determined by the severity of the symptoms, the durations of the symptoms, and the cause of the symptoms. One form of depression is Major Depression, which is one of the most severe cases of depression. More symptoms are present with major depression, and they are usually more intense or serious. The symptoms can develop from one single traumatic experience or can develop over time as a consequence of several personal disappointments or life problems. Major depression can appear once, as a result of a traumatic trauma, respond to treatment, and never appear again within ones lifetime. This is considered a single episode. Some people tend to have reoccurring depression, with episodes of depression followed by several years of no depression. This would be considered recurrent depression.
Another common form of depression is Bipolar, also called manic-depressant disorder. “Living with bipolar disorder is much like living with any chronic illness. With proper medication, education, and support (therapy, support groups, coaching, family and friends), bipolar disorder can be treated effectively.” (Kahn DA, Ross R,) This depression causes extreme mood changes that alternate between manic episodes of abnormally high energy and the extreme lows of depression, making it hard to experience a normal range of mood. Bipolar disorder is extremely hard to diagnose because of its many phases. Just like people who live with conditions like diabetes or heart disease, those with bipolar disorder must learn to manage the condition carefully.
There are many different ways to treat depression depending on the factors involved with the depression. Medical approach to treatment of the depression depends on the type of depression one has. With major depression it is common for one to be prescribed an anti-depressive medication temporarily, along with different forms of therapy. Bipolar is usually always requires some kind of medication, to manage the manic episodes and periods of depression. This includes antidepressants and mood stabilizers and requires long-term therapy. Several different types of medications are available for one to try, but there is no miracle medication that will treat depression in everyone. It’s trial and error with each medication, since everyone's body will react differently to different medications. The use of the various treatments requires close medical supervision to establish the proper treatment. The kinds of depression most likely to benefit from treatment through medications are those with conditions last prolong periods of time (2 weeks or more) and interfere with one's ability to perform daily tasks.
There are many kinds of antidepressant medications. Trycyclic antidepressants, which are considered the “older” class of antidepressants, work quite well. They primarily affect the levels of two chemical messengers (neurotransmitters), norepinephrine and serotonin, in the brain. Although these drugs are effective in treating depression, they have more side effects, so they usually aren't the first drugs used. Some examples of effective and safe Trycyclic medications are Anafranil, Aventyl, Elavil, and Norpramin. Possible side effects would include but not limited to dry mouth, fatigue, weight gain, dizziness, increased heart rate and sexual problems.
Monoamine oxidase inhibitors (MAOIs) are another early form of antidepressant. These drugs are most effective in people with depression who do not respond to other treatments. They are also effective for other mental illnesses. Substances in certain foods, like cheese, bananas, packed soaps and beverages like wine and beer, and medications such as Sudafed can interact with an MAOI, so these people taking this medication must adhere to strict dietary restrictions. For this reason these antidepressants also aren't usually the first treatments used either. Some common perscribed medication would be Parnate, Nardil and Marplan. With side effects ranging from chest pains, vomiting and headache.
Selective serotonin reuptake inhibitors (SSRIs) are a newer form of antidepressant. These drugs work by altering the amount of a chemical in the brain called serotonin. Lexapro, Paxil, Prozac and Zoloft are common effective medications. With side effects of sexual problems, dizziness, headaches and insomnia.
Medication treats the symptoms of depression, and is often a vital part of the treatment program, but it is essential to treat the psychological problems that caused the depression. It doesn’t make much sense to prescribe medications, without offering psychotherapy or counseling as well, because of the added benefits shown in research studies. There are several people who do well and respond positively to just antidepressants, but seem to plateau at a mild level of depression without complete recovery from all the symptoms. The problems that caused the depression are still present. The sufferers haven’t worked through the problems that led to their depression. That’s why psychotherapy or counseling is necessary, in combination with the medication.
Psychotherapy and counseling are similar in many ways but also differ incredibly. They believe in the same process and also have much of the same goals. Counseling focuses on personal development and life adjustment, on a specific life issue. Psychotherapy does the same but more through the medically oriented model of treating a mental disease. PSYCHOTHERAPY [psychotherapy] treatment of mental and emotional disorders using psychological methods. (encyclopedia.com) With focus on the “deeper” issues with those whose life experiences are still causing distress. Counseling and psychotherapy are at both ends of a scale. At one end you have counseling which would be “brief” counseling to deal with a specific issue. Psychotherapy would be at the other end of the scale and deal with deep-rooted issues. “Some counselors or psychotherapists practice a form of 'integrative'counseling, which means they draw on and blend specific types of techniques. Other practitioners work in an 'eclectic' way, which means they take elements of several different models and combine them when working with clients.” (counseling-directory.org.uk) The most important factor that determines how successful the therapy is does not lie in the technique or approach used, but with the actual counselor.
The therapy one chooses to treat their depression takes a lot of consideration for the individual. Each individual must decide which medications are right for their lifestyle and weigh all of the possible side effects. Choosing a therapy approach that suits the kind of depression one might have. It might even take awhile for you to find a counselor that you feel comfortable opening up with. Regardless it’s a step in the right direction to solving this epidemic plaguing the US. Hopefully with added awareness and appropriate diagnosis the numbers of those suffering from depression can drop or be close to be eliminated.
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I made a few changes, some wording changes and a few commas is really about it.

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I'm back for alittle help. This is a optional essay Im doing to help bring up my B's I'm averaging. I have about one more page to add but thought I would post it.

I seem to be having problems with comma splices and fragment sentences. I have tried to revise it but with all thats going on, my eyes are playing tricks. So if you get a chance and lend a girl a couple mins I WOULD REALLY appriciate it. Remeber its NOT done.

Environmental Tobacco Smoke


For many years American citizens have been permitted to smoke in public places. Resulting in smoking becoming accepted as part of the 'normal' behavior. However, recent development of major issues concerning the many effects of smoking in public places has been in the forefront. Should smoking be banned in all public places? Should there be a worldwide ban on smoking in public places? To make an educated decision, one should understand what effects smoking and second hand smoke have on people in general.
Environmental tobacco smoke (ETS), passive smoke also better known as second hand smoke, can be blamed for more then 38,000 deaths annually in America alone. One of the major and most debated effects of secondhand smoking is the negative health effect associated with it. Cigarettes contain many harmful ingredients, which cause many negative health problems when they are released in the form of smoke. Second Hand smoke is the smoke that is released into the atmosphere when a person smokes a tobacco product. (Second Hand Smoke) Smoke itself can be classified into 2 forms of smoke from the burning of tobacco products. Side stream smoke, is smoke that comes from the lighted end of a cigarette, pipe or cigar. Mainstream smoke, is the smoke that is, exhales by a smoker. (Second Hand Smoke: What is it?)
When a nonsmoker is exposed to secondhand smoke it is called involuntary smoking or passive smoking. Resulting in the inhaling of exactly the same carcinogens an actual smoker is inhaling while smoking a cigarette, pipe or cigar. Secondhand smoke is potentially more hazardous than direct smoke. It is estimated that if a person remains for two hours in a closed room where someone is smoking, that person has inhaled the equivalent of four cigarettes. (Second Hand Smoke)
There are many different factors that affect what chemicals are present in secondhand smoke. Including type of tobacco, the chemicals added to the tobacco and how the product is smoked, and the paper in which the tobacco is wrapped. They have identified more then 4,000 different chemicals in mainstream secondhand smoke; however, there may actually be near double that amount at more then 100,000. Of the 4,000 identified chemicals found in secondhand smoke, at least 60 of those are carcinogens (substances that cause cancer), such as formaldehyde. Formaldehyde is commonly used as a disinfectant, for embalming which preservers human remains and also used in paints and explosives. Laboratory animals that have been exposed to high doses of inhaled formaldehyde over their lifetime have developed more cancer in the nose and throat then usual. Six other substances interfere with normal cell development, such as nicotine and carbon monoxide. (The Truth About Smoking)
“Approximately 26% of adults in the United States currently smoke cigarettes, and 50 to 67% of children fewer than five years of age live in homes with at least one adult smoker.”(Children and Second Hand Smoke) ETS (Environmental Tobacco Smoke) is dangerous to everyone, but even more to fetuses, infants and children do to their undeveloped lungs and brain. Children who are regularly exposed to second-hand smoke are at least 50% more likely to develop lung damage and breathing problems such as asthma. They also have a higher risk of developing emphysema as adults. The long-term health effects of exposing a fetus and newborn to smoke threw the mother smoking during pregnancy is still unknown. There are some studies that suggest that smoking during pregnancy can cause birth defects such as cleft lip or palate. Infants who are exposed to a caregiver that smokes, or a mother that smoked while she was pregnant, are up to 4 times more likely to die of Sudden Infant Death Syndrome (SIDS), which is a major cause of death in infant’s age ranging from one month to one year old. These effects can include having a small or underweight baby, and having a baby with abnormal lung function. (Children and Second Hand Smoke)
Exposure to ETS in children of all ages decreases lung efficiency and impairs lung function. Secondhand smoke can increase the severity of childhood asthma along with aggravating sinusitis, cystic fibrosis and chronic respiratory problems such as cough and postnasal drip. The increase of children’s colds and sore throats can be associated with exposure to ETS. Children of parents who smoke half a pack a day or more are at nearly double the risk of hospitalization for a respiratory illness.
Adults exposed to secondhand smoke are more likely to develop eye irritation, nose irritation, throat irritation, nasal congestion, persistent cough, headaches, wheezing, and possible increased risk of lower respiratory tract infections, heart disease, and lung cancer. Secondhand smoke is the third leading cause of preventable death in the United States. The first is direct smoking and the second is alcohol. (Smoking - Effects of Second-hand Smoke on Adults)
The Democratic government recognized the need for limitations be put on people and businesses behavior when there behavior effects others health and safety. There are drunken driving laws, health standards, pollution restrictions for industries and safety standards in manufacturing. All these laws where developed from an understanding the freedom is not absolute. One shouldn’t legally be able to act in a manner that puts others in harms way.
Proposals for and policies adopted to promote clean air do not deny the ability of smokers to smoke. But smoking in occupational work settings, schools, colleges/universities and other public places denies the ability of employees, students and other customers of those places to breathe air that is free of known carcinogens. It is true that cigarettes are legal products. But so too are alcohol and automobiles legal products, and few argue with the wisdom of banning them from being used together in a way that is known to harm others.
During the past few years there have been many bans put in place on smoking in Public places. Laws differ from state to state. Most of the action is at the local level. In New York state smoking is banned in most businesses, including restaurants, bars, bowling alleys, dance clubs and pool halls. Indian casinos are exempted.
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EEK! Catalina! I am so sorry!!!!!

I've been kinda MIA lately!! Have you turned in this essay yet?!?!?

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LoL Its okay. Don't worry about it. I did hand it in so don't worry about it. Didn't do as bad as I thought I was. Got a B
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