hi everyone.

i am trying to write a letter to a senator in albany adressing the arguement of passing a good time bill for certain cases of violent offenders...

I don't know how to open the letter?

dear senator,

i am writing to you to discuss passing a good time bill for violent offenders with certain cases that should be looked over???

is this okay? any advise is greatly appreciated?

Dear Senator ________:

I am writing to request that you consider _______________

I would re-word the "looked over" part. If you want me to review the letter at some point, feel free to PM me. I manage a consulting firm and often proofread/edit this type of writing.